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REFF Critiquers:
 Meriko
Dragonfly
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SaGa Frontier 2 Fanart
Artwork by Arcana
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Personal website: http://ArcanaTxM.tripod.com/
Specialty in Art: People
Specialty in Medium: Powder Sticks/Chalk Pastels
Self-estimated level: Beginning
Artist's Comments: Proportions and foreshortening: specifically, the hands and the feet. Her left foot took a lot of work (and it used to look much worse than before), but it's still looking somewhat improper. Her right arm seems to be "hanging" in mid-air instead of a real part of her body. The left hand doesn't look right either (but it looks a lot better than it did when I started). Alternately, perhaps some advice on good linework would help.
As you can tell, this is the "first-ever original", in that I didn't ink it over or trace it or anything like that. When you draw do your pictures turn out looking like this in the first draft? Yes, and that IS printing on the background. I started to draw this on the back of one of my mis-printed assignments, not really intending it to be anything at all. (You can tell: I had to add another sheet of paper to fit the legs in).
Oh, and if you want, comment on the shading, but it wasn't really meant to be there, as in, it was supposed to be put there just to give a slight impression of 3D. If I plan to shade, I'd put in a lot more effort. I think shading's one thing I can do at the intermediate level.
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Meriko Says: Well, I wasn't one of your REFFs of choice, but I was assigned
to ye. ^^ I'll do my best. As far as capturing a sense of action and movement, the
pose itself is the most important. I dare anyone to capture a sense of action when
they're just drawing someone sitting in a chair. ^^;;; So, you're off to a great
start with the pose. One thing you'll probably want to eat up paper with practicing
on is proportions. You don't even need to draw a body in the exact pose you want to
eventually draw...just practice to get a sense of how the different body parts fit
together and balance each other out. You can study anatomy books and other artworks
to get a sense of proportion, like, "the head is 1/6th of the entire body" etc.
What also works is to draw an oval and then a spine-line, and add simple lines for
arms, etc. and then add in ovals and sausage to fill it into something more
"human." That also helps you to keep the figure all on one page. If you just draw a
head first and then work your way down, you tend to run out of room. For involved
poses like your Ginny, my best piece of advice is to study your own body in the
mirror. (gender/weight/etc. doesn't matter too much for getting a general sense of
how an elbow looks when you're holding a sword.) Or have a buddy pose for ya. (a
very understanding, patient buddy.) The eraser is your friend. Start with extremely
simplistic lines and fill in the detail later. You can always erase extra lines.
Hope that helps!
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Dragonfly Says: Hoi Arcana~ Okay the first thing that jumps out to me on
this piece, is whether or not this is a drawing of a girl or a guy. Hate to sound
rude, but I'm having trouble working out what gender the person is. Now you said
your main problems were with foreshortening, which is evident in this piece. The
first thing I'd change, would be the size of the characters head, It's a bit large
for the persons body. Second thing I guess, would be to improve the general anatomy
of the piece. Overall, the body parts are fairly thin and look very weak. Solid
anatomy is something you have to learn really, to achieve good forshortening,
otherwise your pieces will look a little flat. Some of your anatomy seems okay (for
example, the legs shown here) but other areas need work, like the chest and waist
areas, arms, shoulder etc. I think once you learnt how to draw some of these things
properly, your art will improve greatly. Overall, this is a chalenging pose to
draw, and to make it look as dynamic as you've wanted it to be. But overall, you
have a good base for something which might look pretty great.
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